Boxcar Blues – The Diner

        In town, the lights didn’t seem to shine nearly as bright or as big as they did from far away. The last line of pick-up trucks rushed off to the wreck, grinding gears, leaving the place a ghost town.
       Everything was quiet. I saw the neon sign of a coffee shop ahead.
       The diner stood on the corner of the main intersection. From inside, light shone like a soft halo welcoming a hardened stranger on an even harder night.
       I walked in and turned toward the men’s room. I needed to wash off some of the wreck grit, patch up my leg as best I could from the makeshift first-aid kit I carried in my rucksack. I wanted to make a clean impression when I hit the counter. Friends come from some of the oddest places. Who knows how long the trains would be delayed, how long I’d be stuck here?

       “Hey, pardner,” the guy behind the counter introduced himself. “Hank’s the name.”
       “Nick,” I replied. “Nick Dade.”
       “Just passin’ thru’?”
       “Yeah. I lost my ride, I guess.”
       “Hey. You weren’t in that wreck, were ya?” His eyes glimmered with hope. Tell me about it, he seemed to say. Was there any blood? Did ya see any bodies?
       “Sure,” I answered his unspoken questions. “The engineer bought it. I barely made it alive myself. Cut my leg.” He stretched over the counter to see. My jeans were torn and bloodied. “Just a scratch,” I told him.
       “Hey. You look like you could use a doctor,” he stared at me, his eyes wide with speculation. “You work for the railroad?”
       “Nah. I was riding shotgun on the freight,” I smiled. “Banditos everywhere, ya know. Gotta help out where you can.”
       “A hobo, eh?” From the far end of the counter someone called out. “Good thing the bulls didn’t get you!” He stood from his stool and lumbered toward me with the authority of an undercover cop. I waited for the worst.
       “Ever been to Phoenix?” The words blurted from his mouth like a child asking if the moon was really made of green cheese.
       He was sweating though the night was cool. His breath was short and deliberate. Bad heart, I supposed, and overweight. The smell of stale cigar whispered from his breath. “I hear it’s booming in Arizona. Ever been there?”
       “No. I’m heading to California. I’ve got friends there. They tell me there’s work on the Coast.”
       Hank turned to the man and grinned. “Not here in Claypool City! Only opportunity here was on that train. And now even it’s gone.” Both of the men laughed at the joke.
       Looking around I noticed a couple sitting at a window booth watching us. The woman looked away as soon as our eyes met. Her boyfriend started to say something but she kicked at his leg. She whispered in his ear and they both slid from behind the stall. That raised my eyebrow.
       “Don’t mind them.” Hank turned toward the sink and dried a coke glass with the towel hanging from his apron. He watched my reaction in a wall length mirror at the back of the galley, then turned and took the check from the young man.
       “Thanks Bud. See ya later.”
       “Yeah,” Bud replied.
       The young woman spoke. “Goodnight!” she said with a flip of her long auburn hair. Though she looked at Hank, I felt she directed her words at me.
       “So, what’ll ya have?” Hank turned his attention to his new customer.
       “You got fresh coffee?”
       “Just brewed!”
       “And a wedge of that pie,” I motioned towards a glass-covered dish on the counter.
       By now the heavy breathing fellow had managed to struggle up on the stool next to me. “Give me a cup, too,” he wheezed. He reached his hand out to shake mine.

As he started to introduce himself, he stopped. His face turned blue. His eyes bugged out of their sockets as he collapsed to the floor.
       “Oh, my god!” Hank was over the counter and kneeling next to the old guy before I realized what was happening.
       “Get on the phone!” he shouted at me. “Dial the operator. Her name’s Juanita. Tell her to send the Doctor to the Main Street Diner, quick!”


12 responses

  1. I think you should hit the road again, follow that trail again under the current Trump regime. That would make great reading. I look forward to your blogs, hope you publish soon, your writing would make a great anthology. I recognise some of the types of haunts from my days in the Navy, visiting Texas and Louisiana. Being a Brit abroad I stuck out like a sore thumb. Keep writing Pablo, I look forward to the blogs, but would love to see it on Amazon. I have many likeminded pals who would appreciate it as well, they aren’t consigned to WordPress so don’t have the pleasure.

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    • Thanks, William. I appreciate the vote of confidence, but I’m very gun-shy about self publishing. I had previously offered this story in a short eBook. After a couple of years I reviewed it and was shocked at how much I’d learned about writing since then, and how little I knew before. I was literally embarrassed to see what I had put out. I subsequently pulled it and did a rewrite, which you are reading now in this latest post. Hopefully, if the response is good, I will create that anthology.


      • Just remember what Hemingway said about writing: ‘The first draft of everything is shit.’ I have in my very short space of time had some absolutely abysmal literature put in front of me by so called Amazon authors who boast about there success, asking me to buy it and review afterwards. Yours is from the heart and a good place, I think you should, and as for being ready; most definitely you are.

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          • He sort of does that to people. i hitchhiked around France & Germany with my pal to understand, just a little, about what Kerouac experienced. The guy i travelled with was more in the know regarding Kerouac, i was a Snyder admirer & wanted something more moderate than the craziness of Kerouac: i had done a lot of drugs for a couple of years & got nothing but insanity from it, so Snyder seemed the obvious path forward for me. i also wanted to know what it is like to be lost & free; but more importantly, lost.

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            • Excellent! In a sense, I followed Kerouac because I cringe at the excesses of Ginsberg and Burroughs. I still have a hard time reading their work. Snyder I only knew through his role in The Dharma Bums. I’ve read very little of his stuff. I actually was never into poetry, until I realized most of what I want to say can’t be expressed any other way. You mention drugs. I watched a documentary on Ray Charles when asked about his years of heroin addiction, I was surprised by his response. ‘I don’t know. I didn’t turn out to bad.’ He laughed. I ended up on the wrong end of the drug experience, though I try to write about it in a positive light. ‘Cosmic causalities’ was the term I heard someone use to describe those that refused to deal with the ‘insanity’, as you so mildly put it. That kind of person still takes acid and mushrooms all these years later, none the worse for the wear.

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